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I was in the inspiration to write somthing and I came up with the first 7 scenes of this script. I am only posting the first 3 though if you like them I will post more. If the poll shows you dont like it it shall be moved to the Archives.This is the original script so it is how it is written in my notebook

Scene 1
Hi this is Chris.....

Scene 2
: Hey Dad there is somthing I want to talk to you Can we go in to your office?
Whit: sure just let me tell Connie I won't be around for an hour
Dad I don't need a hour
Whit:Ya but but I want to talk to you too so I thought we could go done to my house and have coffee
(succuming downcast) OK
Scene 3
Whit: Connie I need you to watch the shop the shop for an hour I will come back to help you close up
Connie: (whiny) Whit , why can't Eugene watch the shop for once in a life timeI always have to Eugene can just go home before closing time and be a lovebird with Katrina
Eugene: I come earlier than you
Connie: DO Not.. I come at 6 PM
Eugene: Ya I Know it I come at 5:30 AM
Connie: Eugene you know I ment 6 AM
Eugene: I did not you said 6 Pm
Whit: You 2 quite arguing and now Eugene I want you two to both stay and close up. Now I won't be coming back. And COnnie I want you to to come with me.
Connie: OK
Footsteps Close the scene



I did not do any editing so this is a rough draft. I noticed Eugene and Connie normally do not get in trouble for arguing Connie is coming

Oh no, where are they going? Why are they taking Connie? When will you put up the next scenes?!

Seriously, though, it was good. I loved your utilization of the Jason smiley. That's maybe the second time I've seen anybody use it. Keep writing, because I want to find out what happens.

As a little side note, it would be nice if you checked spelling and punctuation on your next insert. Just makes things a little nicer. I can edit the mistakes out of the first part, if you want me to.

i will put up more scenes.............later
I will not reveal any thing else. I am still working on it.I will try to check my spelling and punctuation

-- Wed Aug 21, 2013 9:00 pm
Now is Later
Scene 4
In Whits office
Connie: What do you want?
Whit: Connie DO NOT talk about Eugene like that. He has a wife and he needs to be with her. I think marige life should be important and he should take time to be with his wife.
Connie:OK Whatever
Whit: And I want you to apoligize to Eugene
Connie: Ok I will
Whit: Now I need to go. See ya.
Connie: Bye.


Scene 5:
Connie: Sorry Eugene for what I said about you and Katrina. Whit toldme you need to talk top keep your marige strong. So I guess I understand. It would be very bad if you seperated.
Eugene: OK You are forgiven.



These are very short scenes but I decided to post them any way.

-- Sun Sep 01, 2013 8:49 pm --

Sorry been on 2 trips got lots written none posted
Will try to post tomorrow I lost the notebook
Sorry for all the bad news

ya very lame

Where is the punctuation?! I can't find it.

dolphinlovr4ever wrote:I was in the inspiration to write somthing and I came up with the first 7 scenes of this script. I am only posting the first 3 though if you like them I will post more. If the poll shows you dont like it it shall be moved to the Archives.This is the original script so it is how it is written in my notebook

Scene 1
Hi this is Chris.....

Scene 2
: Hey Dad there is somthing I want to talk to you Can we go in to your office?
Whit: sure just let me tell Connie I won't be around for an hour
Dad I don't need a hour
Whit:Ya but but I want to talk to you too so I thought we could go done to my house and have coffee
(succuming downcast) OK
Scene 3
Whit: Connie I need you to watch the shop the shop for an hour I will come back to help you close up
Connie: (whiny) Whit , why can't Eugene watch the shop for once in a life timeI always have to Eugene can just go home before closing time and be a lovebird with Katrina
Eugene: I come earlier than you
Connie: DO Not.. I come at 6 PM
Eugene: Ya I Know it I come at 5:30 AM
Connie: Eugene you know I ment 6 AM
Eugene: I did not you said 6 Pm
Whit: You 2 quite arguing and now Eugene I want you two to both stay and close up. Now I won't be coming back. And COnnie I want you to to come with me.
Connie: OK
Footsteps Close the scene



I did not do any editing so this is a rough draft. I noticed Eugene and Connie normally do not get in trouble for arguing Connie is coming

Love it,but I don't think Eugene uses words like ya,bigger words.Though I know there hard to spell,very good wonderful great lovely want more